习作主题精练
【话题分析】
同学们,本单元我们走进了灰姑娘的童话故事,学会了一些用来表达故事情节的句式结构。我们知道了 why 和 because 的用法,也复习了动词的第三人称单数形式。请结合学过的知识,根据图示用自己的话写一写灰姑娘的故事吧。

【写作指导】
开头:介绍人物和故事的起因。
主体:按照情节发展顺序描述内容。
结尾:点明故事的结局,并做出总结。
参考词句:
Cinderella is a nice/beautiful... girl.
There is a party at the prince's house.
Cinderella can't go to the party because...
Cinderella puts on...
Cinderella has a good time...
【参考范文】
Cinderella is a nice girl. There is a party at the prince's house. She can't go there because she does not have any nice clothes or shoes. She is sad. Then a fairy comes and helps her. She goes to the party and has a good time with the prince.
【精彩点评】
1. 提炼关键情节,使用学过的单词、短语和句型进行复述。
2. 按故事情节发展顺序描写,条理清晰。
3. 使用 because,then 等连词,使得上下文衔接自然,有连贯性且完整。
4. 句式有变化,不单一。如 there be 句型、第三人称单数陈述句、肯定句和否定句等。
【小试身手】
一、句型热身。
A. 汉译英。
1. 海伦不得不早点回家。
Helen has to go back home early.
2. 这条短裙不适合她,因为它不是她的。
This skirt doesn't fit her, because it's not hers.
B. 同义句转换。
1. They are bad for them.
They are not good for them.
2. Cinderella wants to try on the shoe.
Cinderella would like to try on the shoe.
3. Bobby does not have any mushrooms.
Bobby has no mushrooms.
二、写作练习。
以上范文并未将灰姑娘的故事讲述完整,你能进行续写吗?请根据课文内容,并展开合理想象,写一写灰姑娘和王子之后的故事。
提示:twelve o'clock;go back;leave... behind;shoe;visit;try on;fit
Cinderella should go back home before twelve o'clock. She says goodbye to the prince and runs away quickly. She leaves one of her shoes behind.
The prince wants to find her. He visits every house. Many girls try on the shoe, but it doesn't fit.
Finally, Cinderella tries it on. It fits! The prince and Cinderella live together finally.
解析:
【分析】
首先梳理本题的解题思路:本题围绕灰姑娘的童话主题展开,分为句型热身和续写写作两部分。第一部分A的汉译英,首先要找准中文对应的核心英语表达,注意主语人称和数的变化,比如第三人称单数的谓语变形,同时正确使用because引导原因状语从句,区分名词性物主代词的用法。B的同义句转换,要回忆课内学过的同义短语替换规则,保证改写后句意完全不变,比如bad和not good的替换,want to和would like to的替换,not any和no的替换。第二部分续写,顺着前文给出的故事脉络,结合题干给出的提示词汇,按照时间先后顺序推进情节:先写十二点的时间节点,灰姑娘匆忙离开落下鞋子,王子寻人的过程,最后试鞋成功迎来圆满结局,保证逻辑通顺,符合童话设定即可。
【解析】
一、句型热身
A. 汉译英
1. 主语Helen是第三人称单数,“不得不”对应固定搭配have to,需变形为has to,后接动词原形短语go back home,副词early修饰动作表“早”,组合得到对应句子。
2. 主语This skirt是第三人称单数,表否定的“不适合”用doesn't fit her,用连词because引导原因状语从句,“她的”后无名词,使用名词性物主代词hers,组合得到对应句子。
B. 同义句转换
1. 短语be bad for(对……有害)的同义表达为be not good for,其余成分保留即可完成改写。
2. 短语want to do sth(想要做某事)的同义替换为would like to do sth,其余成分保留即可完成改写。
3. 否定结构not any可直接替换为no,放在被修饰的名词前,即可完成改写。
二、写作练习
顺着前文故事逻辑,将提示词按情节顺序串联:首先点明十二点的时间限制,灰姑娘匆忙告别王子离开,不慎落下一只鞋,王子决心找到鞋的主人,挨家拜访让所有女孩试鞋,都不合脚,最后灰姑娘试穿鞋子刚好合脚,二人最终幸福相伴,语句通顺符合童话设定即可。
【答案】
一、A. 1. Helen has to go back home early.
2. This skirt doesn't fit her, because it's not hers.
B. 1. They are not good for them.
2. Cinderella would like to try on the shoe.
3. Bobby has no mushrooms.
二、Cinderella should go back home before twelve o'clock. She says goodbye to the prince and runs away quickly. She leaves one of her shoes behind. The prince wants to find her. He visits every house. Many girls try on the shoe, but it doesn't fit. Finally, Cinderella tries it on. It fits! The prince and Cinderella live together finally.
【知识点】
汉译英基础表达
同义句转换
英语故事写作
【点评】
本题贴合单元童话主题的学习目标,从基础句型训练到输出类写作循序渐进,既巩固了have to三单变形、because原因状语从句等核心语法点,也借助提示词降低了续写的难度,能有效锻炼学生的叙事逻辑和英语综合表达能力。
【难度系数】
0.6