B. 写作(计20分)
某中学生英文报开展关于生活变化的征文活动,请你根据要点提示,以"Changes in our life"为题,用英语为该报写一篇稿件,简述社会、家庭、学校及学习方式的若干变化,展望未来生活及如何为此努力。
【要点】1. What changes have you noticed in daily life?
2. How do these changes influence you?
3. What can you do to welcome these changes?
【注意】1. 作文中必须包含所给的要点,可以适当发挥,不要简单翻译。
2. 词数90左右。开头已经写好,不计入总词数。
参考词汇:path 小路
Changes in our life
With the rapid development of China's economy(经济), great changes have taken place in our life in the past few years.
In my hometown, many paths have been turned into wide roads. As a result, it is easier for us to travel. People used to walk or ride bikes to work, but now they often take buses and many even drive their own cars. In schools, students sit in new teaching buildings instead of old ones. There they not only learn from books but also through the Internet.
I hope we will live a better life in the future. I will study much harder from now on so that I can realize my dream.
解析:
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先要明确核心要求:主题是"Changes in our life",必须覆盖题干给出的三个要点,词数控制在90左右,还要用上提示的参考词汇path。首先梳理写作逻辑:先承接题目给出的开头,从自己身边熟悉的场景入手列举生活里的真实变化,比如出行道路、出行方式、学校设施、学习渠道这些维度,对应第一个要点;接着自然点明这些变化给我们带来的便利影响,对应第二个要点;最后落脚到对未来生活的展望,说明自己要付出的实际努力,对应第三个要点。全程不需要生硬翻译要点,用日常学过的简单句式衔接,保证语句通顺即可。
【解析】
写作步骤如下:
1. 审题定位:文体是校园英文报征文,时态综合使用现在完成时、一般现在时、一般将来时,以贴近学生的视角展开,总词数控制在90左右,必须全部覆盖3个给定要点,融入参考词汇path。
2. 搭建内容框架:
① 承接给定开头,列举身边的具体变化:家乡的小路变成了宽阔的马路,人们出行从过去走路、骑车变成现在坐公交甚至开私家车,学校里旧教学楼换成了新楼,学生除了书本还能通过互联网学习,完成要点1的内容。
② 点明变化带来的影响:出行变得更加便捷,学习的资源和渠道也更丰富,完成要点2的内容。
③ 收尾展望未来更美好的生活,表明自己接下来会更加努力学习,实现自身目标来迎接这些变化,完成要点3的内容。
3. 调整语句衔接,修正语法错误,控制总词数符合要求,完成稿件。
【答案】
One possible version
Changes in our life
With the rapid development of China's economy (经济), great changes have taken place in our life in the past few years. In my hometown, many paths have been turned into wide roads. As a result, it is easier for us to travel. People used to walk or ride bikes to work, but now they often take buses and many even drive their own cars. In schools, students sit in new teaching buildings instead of old ones. There they not only learn from books but also through the Internet.
I hope we will live a better life in the future. I will study much harder from now on so that I can realize my dream.
【知识点】
英语征文写作,时态综合运用,写作要点整合
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖题干所有要求,自然融入了参考词汇path,选取出行、校园学习两个学生非常熟悉的生活化场景切入,内容真实不空洞,逻辑衔接流畅自然,词数符合题干90左右的要求,收尾落点到自身的实际努力,完全契合本次征文的主题,是非常典型的优秀初中英语应试写作范例,学生可以借鉴这种从身边小事切入、避免空泛论述的写作思路。
【难度系数】
0.6