五、书面表达
假如你是李明,为唤起大家对海洋塑料污染的关注,创作了一幅主题画作。请根据提示,写一篇90词左右的发言稿,向同学们介绍画作内容、阐述海洋生物的生存困境,并提出保护海洋的具体措施。开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。

提示: What is the painting about?
What problems are sea animals facing in the painting?
What can be done to help with the problem?
Dear classmates,
I'm Li Ming. Today, I want to introduce my painting to all of you. My painting shows
Li Ming
答案:五、Dear classmates,
I'm Li Ming. Today, I want to introduce my painting to all of you. My painting shows
a big whale swimming in the sea, but the sea is full of plastic waste like bottles and bags.
The poor whale looks so sad and helpless.
Many sea animals are facing the terrible plastic pollution in the ocean. Their homes are
destroyed by human rubbish. They have difficulty finding safe food and living spaces.
We must take action to help them right away. First, strict rules should be made to
control plastic pollution. What's more, as students, we can do our part by using cloth bags
instead of single-use plastic ones. Besides, plastic rubbish should be separated into different
groups. All these useful methods can help reduce plastic waste effectively.
Let's work together to protect the ocean. A clean ocean is a happy home for all sea
animals!
Li Ming
解析:
【分析】
首先我们需要紧扣题目给出的三个核心写作要求搭建内容框架:第一步先对应画作内容,观察插图提取核心元素:神情悲伤的鲸鱼、遍布四周的塑料瓶、塑料袋等海洋垃圾,用简洁语言把画作内容介绍清楚,完成第一个写作任务。第二步从画作延伸到现实,阐述海洋生物面临的塑料污染生存困境,点明人类垃圾破坏海洋栖息地、威胁海洋生物食物和生存空间的问题,完成第二个写作任务。第三步提出具体可落地的保护措施,避免空泛表述,从公共政策、学生日常行为、垃圾分类等不同维度给出可行方案,最后发出保护海洋的呼吁,同时注意发言稿的得体语气,控制总词数符合90词左右的要求,保证逻辑连贯衔接自然。
【解析】
1. 画作内容描述:开篇直接点明画作核心内容,写出画中悲伤无助的鲸鱼,以及周围满是塑料瓶、塑料袋等塑料垃圾的海洋环境,完全贴合插图信息,直观清晰。
2. 生存困境阐述:从画作的具象场景延伸到普遍的海洋生态现状,点明塑料污染摧毁海洋生物的家园,让它们难以获取安全食物、找不到合适的生存空间,把海洋生物的生存危机讲得清楚易懂。
3. 保护措施提出:使用逻辑衔接词First、What's more、Besides分层列举具体措施:出台管控塑料污染的严格规定、学生用布袋替代一次性塑料袋、做好塑料垃圾分类,内容具体不空洞,最后发出共同保护海洋的呼吁,契合发言稿唤起大家环保意识的写作目的,整体要点全覆盖,语言流畅自然。
【答案】
Dear classmates,
I'm Li Ming. Today, I want to introduce my painting to all of you. My painting shows
a big whale swimming in the sea, but the sea is full of plastic waste like bottles and bags.
The poor whale looks so sad and helpless.
Many sea animals are facing the terrible plastic pollution in the ocean. Their homes are
destroyed by human rubbish. They have difficulty finding safe food and living spaces.
We must take action to help them right away. First, strict rules should be made to
control plastic pollution. What's more, as students, we can do our part by using cloth bags
instead of single-use plastic ones. Besides, plastic rubbish should be separated into different
groups. All these useful methods can help reduce plastic waste effectively.
Let's work together to protect the ocean. A clean ocean is a happy home for all sea
animals!
Li Ming
【知识点】
海洋环保主题写作,发言稿格式,写作要点全覆盖
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖题目要求的所有写作要点,画作描述生动贴合插图,生存困境的阐述贴合现实逻辑,提出的保护措施具体可落地,衔接词的使用让文章条理清晰,语气符合面向同班同学发言的场景,词数控制得当,是一篇非常规范的主题发言稿,也能很好地达到唤起大家关注海洋塑料污染的表达目的。
【难度系数】
0.6