2025·江苏泰州姜堰第四中学期中改编根据表格内容,以“The changes in my hometown”为题,写一篇100词左右的短文。

【要求】1.表达清楚,语法正确,上下文连贯。
2.必须包括提示中的所有信息,并按要求适当发挥。
3.100词左右。
4.不得使用真实姓名。
The changes in my hometown
My hometown is an old and beautiful city. In the past,
my hometown was very small. People used to live a poor life.
The houses used to be small. The traffic was not convenient.
People used to walk or ride a bike to other places.
Now great changes have taken place in my hometown.
People live a better life. Their houses are large and bright.
Many people have their own cars. People can take a bus or a
taxi to other places. Every year, thousands of visitors from
all over the world come to visit my hometown.
I'm sure my hometown will become better and better in
the future!
答案:One possible version:
The changes in my hometown
My hometown is an old and beautiful city. In the past,
my hometown was very small. People used to live a poor life.
The houses used to be small. The traffic was not convenient.
People used to walk or ride a bike to other places.
Now great changes have taken place in my hometown.
People live a better life. Their houses are large and bright.
Many people have their own cars. People can take a bus or a
taxi to other places. Every year, thousands of visitors from
all over the world come to visit my hometown.
I'm sure my hometown will become better and better in
the future!
解析:
【分析】
拿到这篇提纲类写作题,我们可以按照给定的表格要点分层梳理写作思路:
1. 开篇先介绍家乡基本概况,直接点出家乡是古老又美丽的城市,开门见山;
2. 接着描述过去的状况,围绕“城市很小、人们常步行或骑自行车出行”的核心信息,适当补充过去居住条件普通、交通不便的合理细节,让内容更自然;
3. 之后转入近年变化的部分,对应“生活、交通大幅改善,每年有成千上万世界各地游客到访”的要求,补充现在居住环境变好、出行选择更多的细节,符合今昔对比的逻辑;
4. 最后收尾抒发个人感受,表达为家乡变化欣喜、期待家乡未来更好的心情。
写作时要注意区分时态:描述过去的内容用一般过去时或used to do结构,描述当下的变化用现在完成时、一般现在时,保证语法正确,控制总词数在100左右,不要遗漏任何给定要点。
【解析】
我们按照“总-分-总”的逻辑搭建文章结构:
1. 首段直接点明家乡的基本属性,完成概况介绍;
2. 第二段集中描述过去家乡的样貌,用used to结构准确表达过去长期存在的状态,覆盖过去城市小、出行靠步行/骑车的要点;
3. 第三段介绍近年的巨大变化,从生活条件、交通方式、外来游客三个维度展开,覆盖所有变化类要点;
4. 最后一段抒发个人感受,自然收尾,升华主题。
完整参考范文如下:
The changes in my hometown
My hometown is an old and beautiful city. In the past, my hometown was very small. People used to live a poor life. The houses used to be small. The traffic was not convenient. People used to walk or ride a bike to other places.
Now great changes have taken place in my hometown. People live a better life. Their houses are large and bright. Many people have their own cars. People can take a bus or a taxi to other places. Every year, thousands of visitors from all over the world come to visit my hometown.
I'm sure my hometown will become better and better in the future!
【答案】
One possible version:
The changes in my hometown
My hometown is an old and beautiful city. In the past,
my hometown was very small. People used to live a poor life.
The houses used to be small. The traffic was not convenient.
People used to walk or ride a bike to other places.
Now great changes have taken place in my hometown.
People live a better life. Their houses are large and bright.
Many people have their own cars. People can take a bus or a
taxi to other places. Every year, thousands of visitors from
all over the world come to visit my hometown.
I'm sure my hometown will become better and better in
the future!
【知识点】
提纲作文写作,时态正确运用,常用短语搭配
【点评】
本题是初中阶段非常经典的今昔对比类话题写作,要点提示清晰明确,学生不容易出现偏题问题,只需要按照时间顺序串联内容,注意区分过去和现在的时态差异,适当补充符合逻辑的细节,就能写出流畅连贯的短文,属于中等难度的常规写作题。
【难度系数】
0.7