[润色成篇]
初级范文
How to Communicate with Our Friends
A true friend reaches for your hand and touches your heart. ①Communicating with our friends is important. Here are some suggestions for us.
First, we should trust our friends. We can become good friends on the basis of trust. Second, we should learn to share with our friends, especially when we have problems. Sharing a problem is like cutting it in half. Third, we should help each other. When our friends are in trouble, we should try to help them solve problems. ②Last but not least, we should spend meaningful time together. This can help us understand each other better.
③All in all, if we do these things, we can communicate better with friends and build a stronger friendship.
高分范文
How to Communicate with Our Friends
A true friend reaches for your hand and touches your heart. ① (使用“It＋be+adj.＋for sb＋to do sth.”句式升格) Here are some suggestions for us.
First, we should trust our friends. We can become good friends on the basis of trust. Second, we should learn to share with our friends, especially when we have problems. Sharing a problem is like cutting it in half. Third, we should help each other. When our friends are in trouble, we should try to help them solve problems. ②Last but not least, we should spend meaningful time together, which can help us understand each other better.
③All in all, by doing these things, we can not only communicate better with friends but also build a stronger friendship.
名师指导:
一、高分范文中,①使用“It+be+adj.+for sb+to do sth.”句式升格,不仅使句子结构更均衡、简洁,还能凸显句式多样性;②处使用which引导的非限制性定语从句升格,避免了简单句的重复堆砌,让句子更有层次感;③使用“by doing”短语作状语替代if引导的状语从句,使结尾更加凝练、有力。
二、两篇范文均遵循“总起(开门见山)→分述(逐条给出具体建议)→总结(重申观点,升华主题)”的经典框架,开头以名言引出“朋友”话题,点明了“与朋友沟通”的核心,结尾总结并展望“良好沟通、稳固友谊”,做到了首尾呼应,条理清晰分明,内容重点突出。

青少年正处于人生中最重要的阶段，恰当的沟通可以让生活充满阳光与温暖。你校正在以“学会沟通，让心更近”为主题向学生开展征文活动。请你根据以下提示，结合亲身经历，选择其中一个方面，写一篇不少于80词的英语短文，谈谈你对沟通的理解。
提示：

内容包括：
★your opinion about communication
★an experience you had
★the influence of communication on you
书写区域 Good writing makes your article better.



(请把作文写到自己的练习本上吧！)