[润色成篇]
初级范文
My summer vacation
My family and I went on vacation this summer.
We went to Beijing by plane on August 1st.
Beijing is really a big city. We were very tired when we got there, so we rested in the hotel on the first day. On the second day, we visited many places, such as the Palace Museum and the Summer Palace. We also tasted Beijing roast duck. It was so delicious. We also bought a lot of presents in Beijing. We stayed in Beijing for seven days.
①We were very tired but we were very happy these days. ②Beijing is very beautiful and I would like to travel to Beijing again. I hope my dream will come true.
高分范文
My summer vacation
My family and I went on vacation this summer. We went to Beijing by plane on August 1st.
Beijing is really a big city. We were very tired when we got there, so we rested in the hotel on the first day. On the second day, we visited many places, such as the Palace Museum and the Summer Palace. We also tasted Beijing roast duck. It was so delicious. We also bought a lot of presents in Beijing. We stayed in Beijing for seven .
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(使用 although 引导的让步状语从句升格) ② (使用 “so ... that ...”句型升格) I hope my dream will come true.
名师指导:
一、高分范文中,①使用 although 引导的让步状语从句,增强文章语气,提升表达效果;②使用“so ... that ...”句型,突出了北京的美,强调了再去北京的意愿。
二、两篇范文均遵循“出发背景→核心行程→感受总结”的旅行类作文的经典框架,首尾呼应(开篇点题、结尾表达期待),条理分明,内容重点突出。

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