八、(2025·泰州市姜堰区期末)书面表达。(共10分)
乐于助人是一种美德。帮助他人不仅可以使他人感觉到温暖,也可以使自己获得成长。在和谐社会里,人与人之间的互助已成为我们生活中的重要组成部分。请你以"Helping others makes the world wonderful"为题写一篇短文。
要点:1. Your understanding of helping others. 2. Your experience of helping others. 3. Your feelings of helping others.
要求:1. 内容需涵盖以上所有要点,可适当发挥;2. 词数100左右。短文已给出的部分不计入总词数;3. 文中不得出现真实姓名和校名。
Helping others makes the world wonderful
In our daily life, we often help others, and also get help from others.
答案:One possible version:
Helping others makes the world wonderful
In our daily life, we often help others, and also get help from others. When we help our classmates, we will develop our friendship. When we help people in need, we will feel happy. I think giving is better than receiving.
I still remember my teacher asked me to help my deskmate Mike with his math several weeks ago. At first, I felt a little nervous. So, before helping him, I went over the textbook over and over again. To my surprise, some difficult problems that I couldn't understand before were worked out by myself. With my help, Mike made great progress in math too. From this experience, I realize that helping others also does good to ourselves.
In a word, I hope everyone can take an active part in helping others. Let's make our world filled with love together.
解析:
【分析】
首先拿到这道书面表达题,第一步先审题明确核心要求:主题是Helping others makes the world wonderful,必须覆盖三个指定要点:对助人的理解、自身的助人经历、助人的感受,词数控制在100左右,不能出现真实姓名校名。接下来搭建行文逻辑:首先承接题目给出的开头,先完成第一个要点,阐述自己对帮助他人的认知,点明助人既给他人带去温暖也能让自己收获正向反馈;然后选取中学生熟悉的真实感强的日常事例来写自身助人经历,避免内容空泛;最后结合经历抒发感悟,升华主题发出呼吁,三个部分依次推进就能顺理成章完成符合要求的短文,同时注意表述时混合使用一般现在时表达观点、一般过去时叙述过往经历,保证语法正确。
【解析】
1. 审题定框架:明确文体为夹叙夹议的主题短文,以第一人称书写,时态搭配一般现在时表述观点和感受、一般过去时叙述过往经历,确保三个指定要点全部覆盖,词数控制在要求范围内。
2. 分层完成内容:
① 承接给定开头,先阐述对助人的理解:点明帮助同学可以增进友谊,帮助有需要的人能收获快乐,提出付出比索取更美好的观点,完成第一个要点。
② 选取贴合校园生活的具体事例:讲述几周前老师安排自己帮同桌补习数学,为了讲清知识点反复翻课本复习,意外攻克了之前自己不会的难题,最终同桌的数学成绩也取得很大进步,完成第二个要点。
③ 收尾抒发感受:点明助人也能让自身获得成长,最后呼吁所有人主动参与助人,共同让世界充满爱,完成第三个要点。
3. 最终核查:确认没有出现真实姓名校名,行文衔接自然,语法无误,所有要求都达标。
【答案】
One possible version:
Helping others makes the world wonderful
In our daily life, we often help others, and also get help from others. When we help our classmates, we will develop our friendship. When we help people in need, we will feel happy. I think giving is better than receiving.
I still remember my teacher asked me to help my deskmate Mike with his math several weeks ago. At first, I felt a little nervous. So, before helping him, I went over the textbook over and over again. To my surprise, some difficult problems that I couldn't understand before were worked out by myself. With my help, Mike made great progress in math too. From this experience, I realize that helping others also does good to ourselves.
In a word, I hope everyone can take an active part in helping others. Let's make our world filled with love together.
【知识点】
英语主题写作,时态综合运用,要点整合表达
【点评】
本篇参考范文完全贴合题目所有要求,三个核心要点清晰完整,选取的帮同桌补习数学的事例非常贴合中学生日常校园生活,代入感强,避免了内容空泛的问题。行文从观点阐述到叙事再到感悟升华过渡流畅自然,用到了in need、make great progress、take an active part in等高频优质短语,语法准确,词数符合要求,是非常典型的考场优秀范文,学生可以参考这类从自身真实生活取材的写作思路,更容易写出有真情实感的短文。
【难度系数】
0.6