八、(2025·扬州市仪征市期中)书面表达。(共 10 分)
学校英文报正在举行题为“The changes”的征文活动,请你根据以下内容提示,写一篇短文投稿。
提示:
1. What are the changes in my life?(the environment,living conditions,transport)
2. What are the changes about myself?(two points)
3. What is my feeling about the changes?
要求:
1. 表达清楚,语法正确,上下文连贯;
2. 必须包括所有要点内容,并适当发挥;
3. 100 词左右(开头已给出,不计入总词数);
4. 不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等。
The changes
There are many changes in my life.
答案:One possible version:
The changes
There are many changes in my life. For example, in the past, the factory often put the waste into the river, but now the government has taken action to improve the environment. Besides, people used to live in low and old houses, but now most of them have moved into bright and modern buildings instead. What's more, a lot of families have their cars now while they travelled only by bike or on foot years ago.
On the other hand, I have changed a lot too. Now, I like reading more than before. Reading not only helps me learn a lot about the world but also helps me relax after class. Also, I am more confident than before. I believe the coming future will be brighter and better!
解析:
【分析】
首先拿到这道书面表达题,第一步先明确核心要求:主题是“The changes”,需要覆盖三类必写要点:一是生活层面环境、居住条件、交通的变化,二是自身的两点变化,三是对这些变化的感受,同时要保证语法正确、上下文连贯,词数控制在100词左右,不能出现真实个人相关信息。接下来的思考路径很清晰:先采用“过去-现在对比”的逻辑来写外界生活的三个指定维度的变化,用合适的过渡词串联避免内容零散;之后再写自身的两个具体变化,比如爱好、性格层面的转变,补充对应的小细节让内容更充实;最后收尾抒发对变化的正向感受,点明对未来的期待,最后通读检查所有要点是否都覆盖,字数是否符合要求,有没有违规的真实信息即可。
【解析】
1. 审题搭建框架:文章分为三个模块,完全对应题干给出的所有提示要点,开头已经给出无需额外撰写。
2. 填充第一模块(生活变化):分别对应三个指定方向写对比内容:①环境:过去工厂往河里排废水,现在政府采取行动治理环境;②居住条件:过去人们住低矮老旧房屋,现在大多搬进明亮的现代化建筑;③交通:过去人们出行只能靠骑车或步行,现在很多家庭都有了私家车,用for example、besides、what's more这类过渡词串联内容,逻辑更顺畅。
3. 填充第二模块(自身变化):选取两个清晰的个人转变点:①比以前更热爱阅读,说明阅读能帮助自己了解世界、课后放松;②比以前更自信,两个点都符合题干要求。
4. 填充第三模块(个人感受):收尾点明自己相信未来会变得更好,抒发对所有变化的正向认可,最后检查语法、字数,确认没有遗漏要点、没有出现真实校名地名姓名,符合所有写作要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
The changes
There are many changes in my life. For example, in the past, the factory often put the waste into the river, but now the government has taken action to improve the environment. Besides, people used to live in low and old houses, but now most of them have moved into bright and modern buildings instead. What's more, a lot of families have their cars now while they travelled only by bike or on foot years ago.
On the other hand, I have changed a lot too. Now, I like reading more than before. Reading not only helps me learn a lot about the world but also helps me relax after class. Also, I am more confident than before. I believe the coming future will be brighter and better!
【知识点】
变化类话题写作
时态对比运用
语篇衔接技巧
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖题干所有提示要点,先从社会生活的环境、居住条件、交通三个维度通过今昔对比突出变化,再从个人爱好、性格两个角度展现自身的成长变化,最后自然抒发对变化的正向感受,过渡词使用自然流畅,语法准确,词数符合要求,逻辑清晰,是一篇符合征文要求的优秀短文。学生写作时要注意紧扣“变化”核心,多用今昔对比的表达突出主题,避免遗漏指定要点。
【难度系数】
0.7