五、书面表达。
动物是人类的朋友。学校英语俱乐部将组织主题为“My favourite animal”的征文比赛，请根据表格内容，写一篇短文参赛。
注意：1. 要点齐全并拓展，文章通顺；2. 词数 90 左右；3. 文章中请勿提及真实校名及姓名。
One possible version:
Animals are humans' friends. Of all the animals, I like horses best. My father keeps a horse named Amy.
Amy has strong legs and a long tail. She is brown and black. She likes to eat carrots. When I bring her carrots, she runs to me and makes happy sounds. She likes to run and play in the open fields. She is clever and remembers the way home. She even understands what I am trying to tell her.
I like her very much. She is friendly to me. She is always happy to give me a ride on her back. We have much fun together. It's hard for me to be away from her.
答案：One possible version:
Animals are humans' friends. Of all the animals, I like horses best. My father keeps a horse named Amy.
Amy has strong legs and a long tail. She is brown and black. She likes to eat carrots. When I bring her carrots, she runs to me and makes happy sounds. She likes to run and play in the open fields. She is clever and remembers the way home. She even understands what I am trying to tell her.
I like her very much. She is friendly to me. She is always happy to give me a ride on her back. We have much fun together. It's hard for me to be away from her.
解析：
【分析】
首先拿到这道写作题，第一步先明确写作主题是“My favourite animal”，要紧扣表格给出的所有信息点，避免遗漏。首先开篇先呼应题干里“动物是人类的朋友”的前提，自然引出自己最喜欢的动物是马，名字叫Amy，完成第一个信息点的引入。接下来第二步，按照表格顺序先介绍Amy的外貌，把给出的“strong legs、brown and black”作为核心，适当补充合理的小细节比如长尾巴，让外貌描述更鲜活。第三步接着介绍它的生活特性，把爱吃胡萝卜、爱奔跑、能记住回家的路这些要点结合小场景拓展，比如喂胡萝卜时它的反应，在野外奔跑的状态，让内容不生硬。最后第四步书写个人感想，抒发自己对Amy的喜爱，点明和它相处的快乐，收尾呼应主题，同时控制总词数在90左右，全程不要出现真实校名和姓名即可。
【解析】
本篇作文可以按照三段式结构完成：
1. 开篇段：开门见山呼应题干设定，点明动物是人类的朋友，引出自己最喜欢的动物是马，介绍它的名字是Amy，交代它是家里饲养的小马，快速切入主题。
2. 主体段：依次介绍Amy的外貌特征和生活习性，覆盖所有给定要点：先描述它有着强壮的腿、棕黑相间的毛色，还可以补充长尾巴这类符合马的特征的细节；再依次介绍它爱吃胡萝卜、喜欢在野外奔跑、能记住回家的路的特点，补充少量动作细节让描述更生动，全程使用一般现在时，符合介绍日常事物的时态要求。
3. 收尾段：抒发个人感想，表达自己对Amy的喜爱，描述和它相处的快乐，升华情感，完成全文。
【答案】
One possible version:
Animals are humans' friends. Of all the animals, I like horses best. My father keeps a horse named Amy.
Amy has strong legs and a long tail. She is brown and black. She likes to eat carrots. When I bring her carrots, she runs to me and makes happy sounds. She likes to run and play in the open fields. She is clever and remembers the way home. She even understands what I am trying to tell her.
I like her very much. She is friendly to me. She is always happy to give me a ride on her back. We have much fun together. It's hard for me to be away from her.
【知识点】
话题作文写作，一般现在时，信息整合
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了表格给出的所有信息点，逻辑层次清晰，从引入动物到介绍外貌习性再到抒发个人情感层层递进，补充的细节自然合理，语言流畅地道，完全符合词数要求，也契合本次征文的主题，是一篇很优秀的参赛习作。
【难度系数】
0.6
