五、书面表达
随着世界的持续发展与进步,你的家乡在这三十年间也发生了日新月异的变迁。请根据表格所提供的信息,写一篇约90词的英语短文,向大家介绍家乡这些年的变化,并分享你从中获得的感悟。开头已给出,不计入总词数。
Great changes have taken place in my hometown over the last 30 years.
In the past, people lived in small, old houses. The roads were muddy and narrow.
Back then, people usually got around by bicycle or on foot. If they needed to travel far,
they had to take a long trip by coach. To make a living, most young people had to go to big
cities for more job chances.
Now there have been many changes. The citizens in my hometown have moved into
modern new houses or flats. The roads are clean and wide. It's convenient for us to get
around by high-speed train. Today, many young people return to work in our hometown
after finishing college. I feel proud of these changes and hopeful about the future of our hometown.
解析：
【分析】
首先第一步审题，明确写作要求：主题是介绍家乡30年的变迁，需要对比过去和现在的不同状况，最后补充个人感悟，词数约90词，开头已经给出无需重写。第二步提取表格里的全部图文信息：过去的特征是破旧低矮的老房子、泥泞狭窄的土路、居民出行靠步行或自行车；现在的特征是现代化高层住宅、宽阔整洁的铺装大道、高铁等便捷交通。第三步搭建写作框架：先描述过去家乡的居住、交通情况，再对应描述现在的全新面貌，最后自然抒发自己的感受，注意过去的内容用一般过去时，现在的内容用一般现在时/现在完成时，保证时态准确，语句衔接自然，控制词数符合要求。
【解析】
1. 搭建行文结构：全文分为三个部分，第一部分介绍过去家乡的旧貌，对应三张过去的图片信息，补充合理的生活细节比如过去年轻人要外出务工谋生，让内容更饱满；第二部分介绍当下家乡的新变化，对应三张现在的图片，说明居住条件、道路、交通的改善，补充年轻人毕业后返乡工作的细节，体现发展带来的机遇；第三部分收尾表达个人的自豪感和对家乡未来的期待。
2. 注意时态区分：描述过去的情况统一使用一般过去时，描述当下的现状和已经发生的变化使用一般现在时或现在完成时，避免时态混用出错。
3. 调整语句流畅度，删减冗余内容，保证总词数符合约90词的要求，逻辑连贯。
【答案】
Great changes have taken place in my hometown over the last 30 years.
In the past, people lived in small, old houses. The roads were muddy and narrow. Back then, people usually got around by bicycle or on foot. If they needed to travel far, they had to take a long trip by coach. To make a living, most young people had to go to big cities for more job chances.
Now there have been many changes. The citizens in my hometown have moved into modern new houses or flats. The roads are clean and wide. It's convenient for us to get around by high-speed train. Today, many young people return to work in our hometown after finishing college.
I feel proud of these changes and hopeful about the future of our hometown.
【知识点】
一般过去时，现在完成时，图表类书面表达
【点评】
本题属于贴近日常生活的话题类书面表达，提示信息充足，学生有内容可写，既考察学生对不同时态的区分运用能力，也锻炼学生按逻辑梳理对比信息、组织连贯英文语句的能力，引导学生观察身边的发展变化，抒发真实情感。
【难度系数】
0.7
