五、书面表达
假如你们学校正在招募敬老院志愿服务活动的志愿者,请你根据以下要点,以学生会的名
义写一份90词左右的倡议书,呼吁同学们积极参与活动,关爱和帮助老人。开头和结尾已给
出,不计入总词数。
内容要点:1. What difficulties are the elderly facing? 2. What can we do to help them?
Dear schoolmates,
I'm the chairman of the Students' Union. I'm writing to call on you to join our volunteer
activity in the Home for the Elderly.
The elderly there often feel lonely because their children are busy with work and can't visit them often. Many of them find it difficult to walk smoothly, hear well and go shopping by themselves. As a result, their life is not easy, and they need our care badly.
We can do a lot of meaningful things to help them. First, we can chat with them patiently to cheer them up. Then, we can give some wonderful shows like singing and dancing to bring them joy. Besides, we can clean their rooms and make their living environment nicer. What's more, we can donate some useful things for their daily life.
Your love and care will bring sunshine to their lives. Let's join in this meaningful activity!
The Students' Union
答案:Dear schoolmates,
I'm the chairman of the Students' Union. I'm writing to call on you to join our volunteer activity in the Home for the Elderly.
The elderly there often feel lonely because their children are busy with work and can't visit them often. Many of them find it difficult to walk smoothly, hear well and go shopping by themselves. As a result, their life is not easy, and they need our care badly.
We can do a lot of meaningful things to help them. First, we can chat with them patiently to cheer them up. Then, we can give some wonderful shows like singing and dancing to bring them joy. Besides, we can clean their rooms and make their living environment nicer. What's more, we can donate some useful things for their daily life.
Your love and care will bring sunshine to their lives. Let's join in this meaningful activity!
The Students' Union
解析:
【分析】
首先拿到这道题,先明确写作身份是学生会,文体是志愿招募倡议书,核心要覆盖两个指定要点。第一步先处理第一个要点:梳理敬老院老人普遍面临的困难,先从精神层面说明子女忙于工作很少探望导致老人常感到孤独,再从生活层面说明很多老人行动不便、听力不佳,没法独立完成购物等日常事务,顺理成章引出老人急需关爱的结论。第二步处理第二个要点:结合生活实际列举我们可以提供的帮助,比如耐心陪老人聊天、准备歌舞小表演、帮忙打扫房间、捐赠日常用品,用合适的过渡词串联内容,保证逻辑通顺,语气真诚有号召力,同时控制总词数在90左右,和给出的开头结尾自然衔接即可。
【解析】
1. 承接给定开头,首先完成要点1的表述:先点明老人的精神困境——子女忙于工作无法经常探望,老人时常感到孤独;再点明老人的生活困境——多数老人行动、听力不便,难以独立完成购物等日常活动,由此引出老人迫切需要关爱的结论。
2. 接着完成要点2的表述:用过渡句引出我们可以提供的帮助,再用first、then、besides、what's more等逻辑连接词,依次列举陪老人聊天解闷、表演歌舞节目、打扫居住房间、捐赠日常实用物品等具体志愿行为,内容贴合实际,有说服力。
3. 调整语句保证行文流畅,符合倡议书的正式语气,词数符合90词左右的要求,和给定的开头结尾自然衔接。
【答案】
The elderly there often feel lonely because their children are busy with work and can't visit them often. Many of them find it difficult to walk smoothly, hear well and go shopping by themselves. As a result, their life is not easy, and they need our care badly.
We can do a lot of meaningful things to help them. First, we can chat with them patiently to cheer them up. Then, we can give some wonderful shows like singing and dancing to bring them joy. Besides, we can clean their rooms and make their living environment nicer. What's more, we can donate some useful things for their daily life.
【知识点】
倡议书写作,志愿服务话题,语篇衔接
【点评】
本题是贴近校园生活的应用文写作,题干给出明确的两个写作要点,学生只需要结合生活常识补充合理细节,使用恰当的过渡词串联内容,就能写出逻辑清晰、符合要求的倡议书,注意不要遗漏要点,同时保证语气有号召力,避免内容空洞。
【难度系数】
0.7