八、书面表达(25分)
假如你参加了上周我市举办的马拉松志愿者活动,请结合以下提示,写一篇90词左右的短文,分享你的志愿经历。开头已给出,不计入总词数。
提示:1. Why did you take part in the event?
2. What did you do for the athletes?
3. What have you learned from the event?
Last weekend, our city held a marathon, and I was very proud to be one of the volunteers.
The marathon required support from lots of volunteers, so I signed up at once. I even received training before the event to work better.
On the race day, I stood at a water station to hand out water to the athletes. I also cheered loudly to encourage them. Besides, I helped pick up the empty bottles on the ground to keep it clean. When some athletes felt tired, I guided them to the nearby rest area and handed them wet cloths to cool off.
From the event, I have learned that success never comes easily. The athletes' spirit of never giving up has greatly influenced me. I think it's worth giving up my spare time to experience such a wonderful activity.
解析:
【分析】
这道题是提示类记叙文写作,解题时要紧扣题干给出的三个核心提示点有序展开:第一步先承接已给出的开头,回答第一个问题“为什么参加志愿活动”,可以补充报名、赛前简单培训的细节,让内容更真实饱满;第二步围绕第二个问题“为运动员做了什么”,列举递水、加油、维护赛场卫生、帮扶疲惫运动员等具体的志愿行为,用衔接词串联让叙事流畅自然;第三步回答第三个问题“从活动中学到了什么”,输出正向的活动感悟,比如运动员永不放弃的精神、志愿活动的价值,全程注意叙事部分用一般过去时,谈收获部分搭配对应时态,控制总词数符合要求即可。
【解析】
1. 承接给定开头,完成第一个要点:说明马拉松赛事需要大量志愿者提供支持,自己立刻报名,还在赛前参加了相关培训,为后续服务做好准备,清晰交代参与活动的初衷。
2. 展开赛事当日的志愿工作,依次描述自己在水站给运动员递水、为运动员呐喊助威、捡拾空瓶维护场地清洁、引导疲惫的运动员前往休息区的具体行为,细节饱满,完全符合马拉松志愿者的真实工作场景。
3. 收尾点明活动收获,写出自己感悟到成功来之不易,运动员永不言弃的精神给自己带来很深的影响,同时点明牺牲空闲时间参与志愿活动非常值得,完成第三个要点的表达,全文逻辑连贯,时态使用准确。
【答案】
Last weekend, our city held a marathon, and I was very proud to be one of the volunteers.
The marathon required support from lots of volunteers, so I signed up at once. I even received training before the event to work better.
On the race day, I stood at a water station to hand out water to the athletes. I also cheered loudly to encourage them. Besides, I helped pick up the empty bottles on the ground to keep it clean. When some athletes felt tired, I guided them to the nearby rest area and handed them wet cloths to cool off.
From the event, I have learned that success never comes easily. The athletes' spirit of never giving up has greatly influenced me. I think it's worth giving up my spare time to experience such a wonderful activity.
【知识点】
记叙文写作,志愿话题表达,时态运用
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了题干给出的全部三个提示要点,叙事逻辑清晰,细节真实接地气,衔接过渡自然,时态使用规范准确,情感表达真挚,完全符合题目的词数和内容要求,是一篇高质量的参考范文。同学们写同类提示类作文时,要优先保证所有题干提示点全部覆盖,再补充少量符合场景的细节,就能有效提升作文得分。
【难度系数】
0.6