① 该句运用了定语从句结构,抒发了真实的活动感受;
② 起到了承上启下的关键作用;
③ 文中恰当使用了 First、Second 等连接词,让建议的呈现更具条理性;
④ 结尾句使用了宾语从句,表达了个人的观点,做到首尾呼应,使短文结构合理。
王军,代表你们班同学给校长写一封信,就改善学校餐厅提出几点建议,内容如下:
1. 增加食物的多样性;2. 改善就餐氛围,如播放音乐等;3. 提升餐厅工作人员的服务质量。
要求:90 词左右,已给出部分不计入总词数。
参考词汇:variety 不同种类;atmosphere 氛围;staff 员工
[思路点拨]
① 人称:以第一人称为主;② 时态:以一般现在时为主;③ 写作时要注意顺序,先从食物、就餐氛围、餐厅员工的服务三个方面提出建议,最后希望个人的建议有帮助。
[写作提纲]

[妙笔生花]
Dear Headmaster,
I am writing this letter to
make suggestions on improving our school dining hall.
First, I suggest adding more food varieties. Different kinds of food can make us healthier. Offering different food, like Italian pasta or spicy Sichuan dishes, will surely satisfy different tastes.
Moreover, improving the dining environment is great. Playing soft background music can make the atmosphere more relaxing.
Finally, I have a suggestion for staff service. Training them to be more friendly and efficient will make students have a wonderful dining experience.
I hope you find my suggestions helpful in making our dining hall better.
Best wishes,
Wang Jun
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解析:
【分析】
本题为英语应用文写作题,要求以王军的身份给校长写一封建议信改善学校餐厅。解题思路如下:① 遵循书信三段式结构:开头段点明写信目的;中间段用连接词分点阐述建议;结尾段表达期望并呼应开头。② 确定人称以第一人称、时态以一般现在时为主。③ 中间段紧扣三个要点:增加食物多样性(可补充不同种类食物的例子)、改善就餐氛围(如播放轻音乐)、提升员工服务(如培训员工),用First、Moreover、Finally等连接词让内容条理清晰,补充细节使内容充实。
【解析】
1. 开头段:明确写信目的,即给校长提改善学校餐厅的建议,对应框架中“I am writing this letter to...”的要求。
2. 中间段:用First引出第一个建议(增加食物多样性),补充不同种类食物的例子;用Moreover引出第二个建议(改善就餐氛围),说明播放轻音乐的作用;用Finally引出第三个建议(提升员工服务),说明培训员工的好处,对应框架中“First, I suggest...Moreover...Finally, I have a suggestion for...”的要求。
3. 结尾段:表达希望建议有帮助,呼应开头的建议目的,对应框架中“I hope you find my suggestions...”的要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Headmaster,
I am writing this letter to make suggestions on improving our school dining hall.
First, I suggest adding more food varieties. Different kinds of food can make us healthier. Offering different food, like Italian pasta or spicy Sichuan dishes, will surely satisfy different tastes. Moreover, improving the dining environment is great. Playing soft background music can make the atmosphere more relaxing. Finally, I have a suggestion for staff service. Training them to be more friendly and efficient will make students have a wonderful dining experience.
I hope you find my suggestions helpful in making our dining hall better.
Best wishes,
Wang Jun
【知识点】
英语书信写作、连接词使用、宾语从句
【点评】
本题考查建议信的写作,要求学生掌握书信格式,合理运用连接词使建议条理清晰,同时能结合要点补充细节,符合初中英语写作的核心要求,注重实用性与结构完整性,是常见的英语写作题型。
【难度系数】
0.5