实战演练
春赏繁花,夏憩幽荫,秋拾硕果,冬戏琼雪,四季流转,各有韵味。鹿鸣英语社团正在组织题为“一段季节回忆”(A Seasonal Memory)的征文比赛。请根据以下提示,写一篇短文参赛。
A Seasonal Memory
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| Introduction | Which season holds a special memory for you? |
| Main Body | What did you

in the season? |
| Main Body | How did you feel at that time? |
| Conclusion | Why do you think this memory is special to you? |
【注意】1. 文中不能出现真实的姓名、校名等信息。
2. 文章必须包含所有要点,可适当发挥,使短文连贯、通顺。
3. 90词左右。(文章开头已给出,不计入总词数)。
A Seasonal Memory
The season with a special memory for me is
spring
答案:One possible version
A Seasonal Memory
The season with a special memory for me is spring. When spring arrives, nature wakes up and my heart is filled with hope and joy.
Last spring, my family and I went to the local park to enjoy the lovely flowers. The air was full of the sweet smell of roses and the gentle wind was refreshing. I remember running on the grass and feeling the warmth of the sun on my face. At that time, I felt truly happy and free.
This memory is special to me because it makes me think of the simple joy of life and the love of my family.
解析:
【分析】
拿到这道提纲类英语写作题,我们可以按三步思考:第一,先明确写作要求:主题是"一段季节回忆",需要覆盖全部4个提示要点,词数90左右,不能出现真实个人信息。第二,选择自己容易展开描写的季节,比如春天,选取生活化的真实经历(比如和家人春日踏青)来填充内容,避免内容空洞。第三,安排行文结构:开篇直接补全给定开头点明特殊回忆所属的季节,主体部分先讲过往在这个季节发生的具体事件,再描述当时的感受,结尾点明这段回忆的特殊意义,注意叙述过去事件时统一使用一般过去时,适当补充环境细节让文章更生动自然。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题:补全给定的开头句,点明承载特殊回忆的季节是春天,简单描写春日万物复苏的氛围,自然引出下文。
2. 主体段落:先交代去年春天和家人去公园赏花的具体经历,补充花香、和风、晒太阳等细节丰富内容,之后描述当时愉悦放松的感受,完整对应题目中"做了什么""感受如何"两个主体要点。
3. 结尾收束:说明这段回忆的特殊价值,既关联生活的简单美好,也体现家人的陪伴,呼应全文主题。
全文时态使用规范,客观描述季节特征用一般现在时,叙述过往经历用一般过去时,行文衔接流畅,所有提示要点全部覆盖,词数符合要求。
【答案】
A Seasonal Memory
The season with a special memory for me is spring. When spring arrives, nature wakes up and my heart is filled with hope and joy.
Last spring, my family and I went to the local park to enjoy the lovely flowers. The air was full of the sweet smell of roses and the gentle wind was refreshing. I remember running on the grass and feeling the warmth of the sun on my face. At that time, I felt truly happy and free.
This memory is special to me because it makes me think of the simple joy of life and the love of my family.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作,一般过去时运用,提纲类作文谋篇
【点评】
该范文完全覆盖题目所有要求的写作要点,选取和家人踏青的生活化场景,细节饱满情感真挚,没有冗余内容,时态使用准确自然,行文连贯流畅,词数符合90词左右的要求,很贴合本次征文的主题调性,是一篇合格的优秀参赛短文。
【难度系数】
0.7