经典例题
(2025·江苏淮安一模改编)不惧碾作尘,无意苦争春。张桂梅的精神值得我们学习,她的行为值得我们敬佩。在你的成长路上,也一定出现过值得你敬佩的人。这个人可能是你的父母、老师或你的朋友……你们学校正在组织英语作文比赛,请根据图示要点,以“The person I respect”为题,写一篇短文参赛。

【要求】
1. 不得在作文中出现学生的真实姓名和学校名称。
2. 语句连贯,词数80左右。
The person I respect
写作指导
1. 用第三人称来写。
答案:The person I respect
The person I respect most is my mother. She is a community doctor, looks gentle and always wears a warm smile. She is kind and patient to everyone around her.
Two years ago, she volunteered to work at the community health station for over a month. She was busy checking health information for people and sending medicine to lonely old residents, never complaining about the hard work.
Her deeds teach me to be a responsible person. Now I also take part in volunteer activities to help people in need.
解析:
【分析】
首先明确写作主题是“我敬佩的人”,需依据图示的三个核心要点展开:1.人物介绍(包含职业、外貌、性格等);2.敬佩的具体原因(人物做过的具体事迹);3.人物对自己的影响。选择合适的人物(如家人、老师等),用第三人称写作,确保语句连贯,词数符合要求,不出现真实信息。
【解析】
第一步:介绍人物,说明其职业、外貌与性格,如选择母亲,介绍她是社区医生,外貌温柔带微笑,性格友善耐心;第二步:列举具体事迹,如两年前志愿在社区卫生站工作一个多月,帮居民查健康信息、送药给独居老人,不抱怨辛苦;第三步:阐述人物对自己的影响,如教会自己做负责任的人,自己也参与志愿活动。
【答案】
The person I respect
The person I respect most is my mother. She is a community doctor, looks gentle and always wears a warm smile. She is kind and patient to everyone around her.
Two years ago, she volunteered to work at the community health station for over a month. She was busy checking health information for people and sending medicine to lonely old residents, never complaining about the hard work.
Her deeds teach me to be a responsible person. Now I also take part in volunteer activities to help people in need.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作,人物介绍,作文结构
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求,严格按照图示要点展开,结构清晰,事例具体,语言简洁通顺,准确表达了敬佩的人物及其优秀品质,以及对自己的积极影响,符合英语作文比赛的要求。
【难度系数】
0.5