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五、书面表达
在我们成长的道路上,总有一些人像灯塔一样照亮我们的心灵。他们甘于奉献、坚守初心,用一生做有价值、有意义的事,传递着榜样的力量。请以“The Role Model in My Heart”为题,用英语写一篇100词左右的短文,介绍你心目中的榜样。
要点:1. Who is your role model?
2. What did he/she do?
3. What can you learn from him/her?
The Role Model in My Heart










答案:The Role Model in My Heart
The role model in my heart is Zhang Guimei. She has a heart full of love.
When she saw many mountain girls drop out of school, she decided to do something for them. She started a free high school for poor girls in Yunnan. For over 20 years, she has fought for those girls to get an education. Though she has met a lot of difficulties along the way, she never gives up. Her love and hard work have helped lots of girls change their lives.
I'm amazed by what she has done. She shows us that a meaningful life is more about giving than receiving. I hope to be a helpful person like her in the future and try my best to pass warmth on to people around me.
解析:
【分析】
首先审题,明确题目要求是写一篇100词左右的英语短文,介绍心目中的榜样,需覆盖三个要点:榜样是谁、他/她做了什么、能学到什么。接着选择有典型奉献事迹的公众人物(如张桂梅)作为榜样,确保有内容可写。然后安排文章结构:开头点明榜样身份,中间叙述其核心事迹,结尾表达个人感悟与收获。最后注意控制词数,使用准确的英语表达,避免语法错误。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题:直接点明心目中的榜样是张桂梅,引出其充满爱心的特质;
2. 叙述事迹:说明她看到山区女孩辍学后,创办云南免费女子高中,20多年来坚持为女孩争取受教育机会,克服诸多困难仍不放弃,帮助女孩改变命运;
3. 表达感悟:阐述从她身上学到“有意义的生活在于给予而非索取”,并表明自己未来要做传递温暖的人;
4. 调整语言:确保语句通顺,词数符合要求,无语法错误。
【答案】
The Role Model in My Heart
The role model in my heart is Zhang Guimei. She has a heart full of love.
When she saw many mountain girls drop out of school, she decided to do something for them. She started a free high school for poor girls in Yunnan. For over 20 years, she has fought for those girls to get an education. Though she has met a lot of difficulties along the way, she never gives up. Her love and hard work have helped lots of girls change their lives.
I'm amazed by what she has done. She shows us that a meaningful life is more about giving than receiving. I hope to be a helpful person like her in the future and try my best to pass warmth on to people around me.
【知识点】
英语书面表达、人物介绍类写作
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求,完整覆盖所有写作要点,内容具体充实,情感真挚,语言流畅自然,准确传递了榜样的正能量,是一篇符合要求的优秀范文。
【难度系数】
0.7
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